• siderealyear@lemmy.world
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    1 year ago

    This is too verbose to be usefull. The narrative style makes it hard to extract information. The reader is duely impressed with the writer’s knowledge, but that impression is about all that is gained by the read - 'I’m smart and know how this should be done".

    Organize and emphasize the result and the method to obtain it.